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| Hed in the Cloudz 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseShort, depressing, beautiful. I love it! It gets the point across just as well but twice as quickly as most of the rewritings, which makes it even better. There isn't much constructive criticism to give about a twenty five word poem, but maybe the format could be changed? I would think that "he never comes" would be what you would want to stand out most, and yet it is just like the majority of the rest! -Yna, from the Review Marathon-- see the link in my profile! |
| fallin4ualwayz 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseur officially on my favourite authors list now! |
| krazykatie 2007-04-29 ch 1, | abuseI can't believe something so short could have so much meaning. |
| tad 2007-04-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseits always like that :( |
| Kissing Concrete 2007-04-08 ch 1, | abusethis is so sad but written with such harsh truthfulness that it is not hard to believe that it is true |
| sweets555 2007-04-05 ch 1, | abuseperfect once again. you're an amazing writer, you get to the point, but you do so delicately. love it |
| MadMaverick 2007-04-05 ch 1, | abusemy sentiments exactly. |
| ohthevoices 2006-12-31 ch 1, | abuseSo much better than the Disney version. (I gag just thinking about it.) Love it! |
| greenGalilee 2006-12-30 ch 1, | abuseSad. Bittersweet. I think I prefer your version of the story to the popular one. Good haiku. Keep writing, please. |
| thursdays and rain 2006-11-21 ch 1, | abuse(cries)(dies)(screams: ice cream) |
| RaindropsOnBlackRoses 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abuseit is the real story. i liked this one, even though it's sad...it's just life. |
| Guardrail 2006-09-22 ch 1, | abuseSo sad. But wonderfully written. Keep writing. |
| MonsterGirl 2006-09-19 ch 1, | abusevery interesting =) |
| call me ish 2006-09-19 ch 1, | abuse:) beautifully tragic just how i like(love) it. The formatting on this was WICKED! I'm getting quite sick of how everyone seems to be using it, but you have a knack for using it well so it makes the piece even more perfect :D. And kudos of all kinds to you for calling her Ella :), it made me smile. Hardly anyone seems to know that is her actual name and that CinderElla is the mean name her step-sisters gave her. Yey :D. I think I might love this :) |
| Emmytastic gal 2006-09-17 ch 1, | abuseVery very interesting!! I like it a lot :) It's very unique and lots of substance in such few words. Great work. write on, -Em p.s. thnx so much for the review, you brightened my day :) |