I was wondering when you're going to update.

I have really enjoyed this story. I can't tell if it's completed or not, but I've got to say it was wonderful. My only advice would be to work on the arrangement of the dialogue. It was a little confusing at times. All the same, amazing work you have. I commend you.

Very interesting story here. It seems, especially the first chapter, very film noir, what with the narration and dark descriptions. I think the transition between first person and third person (like when you describe characters in another room) is a bit rough, so you may want to keep it completely first person, or italicize the third person stuff. Overall an interesting story!