|Reviews for Articulate Defiance|
| Sukidayo 10/20/06 . chapter 3
Not too bad. I did like the idea of using an old form of torture with the drops and the such. There was one grammer thing that stuck out that bugged me. You have 'and they drug me away' That should be 'dragged'. There's no such thing as drug me away.
Other than that it wasn't a bad chapter. Keep it up. And thanks again for helping me out with TFAF.
| Sukidayo 10/8/06 . chapter 2
Not too bad. It was better than the first at least and a lot easier to understand. However, i find that the paragraphs are a bit too long and the dialogue was a little run-on. You should start a new paragraph with the dialogue. That way, readers could have a better sense of who's saying what.
But it was good nonetheless. Keep writing and email me when you get a new section/chapter up.