| Reviews for flowers never lie |
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hide your eyes 12/29/07 . chapter 1this is such an amazing concept, and this poem really does it justice. i loved it. |
SirenThird 10/24/06 . chapter 1This is a gorgerous haiku, I can just picture this girl looking through the fields for the right flower. You've created a really beautiful, creative image here; however tragic. The only possibly helpful thing that I could say that I noticed for most of your poems is that if you didn't know the title of the piece before reading, they don't stand up as well. Just and I scour the fields of daises to find the one that says, “he loves me”. Doesn't land as well as flowers never lie and I scour the fields of daises to find the one that says, “he loves me”. At least not for me anyway. I'd suggest using the title as more of a garnish than part of the actual poem. And if I'm spitting out bubbles here then just ignore me. :p Anyway, good job. |
Enya Putsch 9/24/06 . chapter 1i love this one- it's so sad and desperate. I also LOVED your one about being five and cinderella and prince charming- that was immense. i know exactly how you feel- being a kid is so much better than growing up. it sucks! |
chocohound 9/22/06 . chapter 1Another great one! I know I've gone through the daisies just to get that right one. As if all fate depends on that daisy. Great job! |
dress her up in fairytales 9/20/06 . chapter 1short, simple, but powerful. i can say that i've felt the same way. |
citrus scented 9/20/06 . chapter 1oh i love this! its such an image of desperation, and the whole "he loves me" on daisies is such a young image...it really works. it sort of shows how the relationship works so subtly. and "scour" is a great harsh word with the pretty diasy images. great piece. |
burning in effigy 9/18/06 . chapter 1love the idea and the simplicity, allowing the reader to get a lot from just three lines great job! |
Crossing the Rubicon 9/18/06 . chapter 1Oh, I love this! Great haiku. |
classic violet 9/18/06 . chapter 1vivid and beautiful. |
Atelophobia 9/17/06 . chapter 1I love the simple idea of this, how you convey it. Definitely one of the most effective use of haiku I've seen so far. |
Basara 9/17/06 . chapter 1like a child do? if so... sweet... nice... |
autumnmurder 9/17/06 . chapter 1I can almost picture a colorless field of flowers with a girl searching for just one with a little vibrancy. Very nice. Short, and sweet. |