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| Amnesty 2007-03-22 ch 1,  | abusemy friend you are a talented writer. im new to this site and your tale was the first i read. the seens were fast but well expained. it was like i could in the center or the mayhem as the hunters bullets shot through the wolves, blood washing the floor in red. the only thing i would change is...nothing really. im waiting more on the plot though. i want to see more on the Mattew.. Keep up the good work |
| The Burning Rose 2007-03-04 ch 1, | abuseThis story is realy good. I love the action scenes. The description is brilliant. Chekk out my stories: Broken Wings an Born in Flames. I give your story 10 stars out of 10. Keep up the great work and hit me up when you update your story. |
| YJanZ-Providence 2006-12-16 ch 6, | abuseMatthew and Rick seems like a badass pair, kinda reminds me of a good cop, bad cop routine (or in their case, calm cop, bad cop, lol). Hoping for action in the next! Nice chapter, btw. See ya! aka Ace |
| YJanZ-Providence 2006-12-16 ch 5, | abuseHm, looks like the main plot of this story is being set in motion. I could sense that the following chapters would be badass. Cool chapter dude. See ya! aka Ace |
| YJanZ-Providence 2006-12-16 ch 4, | abuseYeah! I had to reread the past chapters since it's been quite a long time already. Anyway, Matthew's badass, the wings are great, and the description of them (the manifestations of everything that made his life worth hating... and everything that made it worth living.) was simply great. Cool chapter, the action is great. lol, get ready: December 24; Angel's Halo: Requiem of Tears. See ya! aka Ace |
| Trazia 2006-11-10 ch 4, | abuseCool he has wings |
| Trazia 2006-11-10 ch 3, | abusewow this was great i wonder what is going to happen next |
| Trazia 2006-11-08 ch 2, | abuseanother brillient chapter well done you are really good have you considered becoming an author when you grow up, cause you are really that good. |
| Trazia 2006-11-08 ch 1, | abusewow this was really good damn i wish i could write like that u where so discriptive, wow keep up the great work. |
| Darket 2006-11-05 ch 5, | abuseFInally I've quit smoking, and I got this far. This story is good and it's good that the chaps are short. Lots of people write chaps really long. Good work here. |
| Darket 2006-10-28 ch 2, | abuseKinda has a dark plot going with some Matrix liike Dialogue which is short but big meaningful phrases. This is good, I'm definitelly adding it to For Whom the Bell Tolls. I'll make sure to read the rest once the withdrawals subside. I'm in the middle of quitting smoking, and it's day two. So at the moment my head kinda hurts. Anyways, see you around |
| SympleSymon 2006-10-19 ch 3, | abuseNice battles! I guess I'll be saying that a lot in time to come, huh? And Domivich sounds wicked - in BOTH senses of the word! Great chapter! |
| SympleSymon 2006-10-19 ch 2, | abuse“Perhaps he knew the Frenchman.” I don't know why, but I creased up at that line! But all in all, this was another brilliant, well-detailed chapter with awesome action! |
| SympleSymon 2006-10-13 ch 1, | abuseWhat the hell?! This was awesome! The way the battle progressed with astonishly fast, with details being minimal yet effective - any further time taken to describe things may well have slowed the pace down badly - and the action was well-written. My only question is this: The bullets, shells, what-have-you...were they silver? Because you never mentioned if they were (unless that comes later),and if they weren't, how did they kill the werewolves? I'm really glad Dice pointed me in the direction of this, and YjanZ should be proud you got inspiration from their story! SympleSymon (aka Stargazer) |
| Dice Darwin 2006-10-06 ch 6, | abuseGood chap. I like the character interaction. Sometimes it helps the story to have an actual conversation take place. The route to Matthew's home was described very well. It was cool. And no, Strike Me Down isn't over. I was just dead tired by the time I finished that chapter. Thats why the author's note seemed so lifeless, I guess. I'll be blunt with you. No one will ever read this story as long as its in the action section. That section is dead. No one really reads there. Just look at all the other recent action stories and see how many reviews they have. Since this was inspired by Yjanz's Angel's Halo, you should put this in the manga section like that is. Since no one ever really defined what all fits into manga, you can put anything there. Catch you later. Snake Eyes of aka Meteor-Infinity |