tantalizing. completly entrancing. im a mythoogy geek myself. So im in luv with this. cant wait to read more. u truly have a gift for poems. -Salem

Pretty good overall! Very storyish. Some of these lines were amazingly put. For example, "And your eyes come to life with the fire of a thousand hells." That's my favorite line. I don't know why. It's well described. Or maybe I just like eyes being described in that way. But it was dark and sexy. Yes, that's exactly what I thought.

And it ended good as well. It leaves you with that question and really makes you wonder.

Interesting. I made a poem about a vampire, but I never got around to posting it. That was pretty good.