Thanks for the advice Shanima. Hopefully it's a little more easy to read now. And of course thanks to everyone else who has reviewed. :D

Good description - they really appeal to the senses. Try paragraphing your story, it makes it easier to read.

Shanima -x-

oh man i can see it! that was so nice. i love this story. i can really see the character position. makes me smile:-)

This is just too cute. Had it not been September, you'd have inspired me to go outside and make a snowman. :)And I loved the detail!

[.. if my coding doesn't work, sorry. I haven't reviewed much before.]

Oh wow, that was good. You did a great job getting across the kids eagerness and the mum fussing and not letting the kid get on with it. And the ending was lovely...I want snow!