Thats amazing mellon-nin. I love it. Now only if I ever understood why or what you're writting for/about.

For the most part, this has a nice flow, but in some places (like this: "I’m fighting back the memories /But they’re too strong and soon they win") there seem to be too many syllables in the line. Otherwise, it's decent, and I like the last stanza and especially these lines: "Its hollow voice asks me, ‘why love/If love will eventually lose?’"

Vivid pictures painting haunting emotions. Excellent. Loved it.