I liked the whole. entire. thing. This was simply so INTENSE. Again, I was ON MY TOES the whole time. I love how you keep me around with your fairytale analogies. But then! You incorporate real-life. You put yourself in her place. You make it all FLOW. Brilliant. If you put out a book, of just Alice poetry, I'd buy it. Really. I would.

I reallyreally enjoyed the last stanza. It really showed how perfection is in the eyes of the beholder, & everyone has their own definition. I really liked the line, "smiling through crimson stained teeth." It was really intense, raw, emotional. SO. POWERFUL. Just like all your poetry is. Excellent.

-Review Marathon, the link's in my profile.

Morbid. Intense. Youarereallybegginningtoscareme. Nice Job.

Intense is really the only word for this piece. Great job! I really liked the way you worked yourself in as Alice; "But I’m (Alice is) over all that now--" That hit it home, I think, made it more real in a sense. Very nice job, as with the rest of your work. I enjoyed it!

Just Wow. Wow. Wow, wow wow wow wow.


Wow.

Gorgeously bitter and blatant, this poem really stands out at you. Not normally my cup of tea, but hey, I could be persuaded. Keep up the good work, Lemonsausagex

*is speechless*

*is happily speechless, and very wide-eyed*

"telling herself that mommy will love her once she's perfect."

Venom.

Oh that is so sad. A good poem but really sad! *hug*

Hm.. I'm not sure I identified properly with this poem but... I did in some ways =)Great poem, really you have a great talent

Keep them coming ^^

nK*

Wow. this is as amazing at all your other stuff. I love your style (and this is getting more general, sorry...) i love the raw-ness (sorry if it isn't a word...) and argh just the amazingness of your poems. They are really really inspirational! Argh so much to say but reveiws are so... read by everyone lol. But yeah, your stuff is ** amazing, thank you for writing some of the best poetry I've read on here...

Wow, first off, about your review? On my one poem. Yeah, I don't know who the person is that flamed you. I don't know who they are, I know no one personally on this site. So, I guess you definitly over reacted. But it's okay, thanks to your review, I know no what it's like to be flamed, but I'll handle this in a more mature way than you did. By the way, using curse words doesn't make you "cool" okay?

and why would you call me? "so much better than you" I haven't tried to prove that at all? and also, for your information? I may not know what its like to be in love, I'll admit that, but I wrote that when I was upset. So, hey, if you didn't get that, oops. All well. Sorry, my poem wasted your time reading it, but hey, you wasted your time by filling my review page with filth. And thanks by the way. Anyways. I'm sorry your feelings obviously got hurt by this loser that flamed you. I hate flammers...and I guess you just weren't able to handle it? So, yeah. I guess maybe i'll grow out of my immaturity since I'm only 12, and who knows? Maybe improve my writing as well.

Whatever

Keep writing, and also, keep your little anger and emotions in your poems, not in other peoples reviews. :)

~tearsxofxsilence~

No words are needed...

wow... another amazing poem. Favorite lines: "Alice only ever wanted a chance to die, but gunsaren’t for kiddies, and whateight-year-old can get their hands on arsenic?"I love how you put yourself in the place of Alice throughout all your stuff.Keep posting new stuff.--Darkest Angels