oh interesting. It does sound intriguing... the part where the boy waits for the train reminds me of Anne of Green Gables.

I hope you will continue the story. PM me anytime. (smile)

Itneresting...I like it so far, keep it coming :)

(In return for reviewing CaF)

This is good, I'd like to see more. It doesn't draw me in as much as some other stories, but it looks like t has potential (plus it's slash, so I'm not gonna overlook it :D)

You're first ever slash? Is the narrator a boy or a girl? You've given us no clue...

Okay - you're actually doing better than I'd have guessed for a 15 yo (I'm 45 myself - yeah, one of those stalkers you've heard about). Spelling, grammer, punctuation, paragraphing are all excellent. The first sentence is a little... "dark and stormy night"ish - but that's just an opinion.

And a further opinion is that it's too expositive - you're telling us too much while nothing has happened to make us interested. You can do that in a novel - not that that would make me like it - but once someone has decided to dig into 100,0 or more words, they'll put up with waiting for something interesting for a chapter or more, sometimes.

As it stands, I have no real reason to care what happens to this guy/girl. Some kind of hint is all it takes... get us to care about him/her, THEN roll out the background. Then we'll be paying attention.

There, you said you wanted constructive criticism... :)

for the most part i think its good just theres not much to go by so MORE SOON and try to be...more informative!

just as always u dont disappoint. keep it up.

It's a good start to the story, hope it continues to get better. Um, nothing else 'cept write more soon :)