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| OutKastPoet 2008-06-25 ch 1,  | abuseLove the rhyming end rhymes and rhymes within the lines. A sweet yet twisted alibi very nice work |
| Nemonus 2007-01-01 ch 1, | abuseNice artfully disjointed rhythm. It's shattered a little. I don't quite get what this one's about because I can't get out of my own mindset, which takes all the meaning from the words "haven" and "Under the glimmer of the haggled fears". ((Even) pain is so nice when its written?) But maybe that's it. Your imagery doesn't sustain itself--I can't see the connections between, for example, the first two lines, while individually they do mean something. Vagueness makes many of your poems into something foggy, and if you want it like that good job, but if you want to make a point I'd make it clearer. You are creative. |
| tuieri 2006-12-11 ch 1, | abuseyay EAP. possibly my favorite poet/author. lovelove the allusions to his works :) |
| Nixe 2006-11-19 ch 1, | abusehey thanks for the review i really like this piece, the language and the whole idea behind it was well written. Keep writing :D Nixe |
| sereneXOangel 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abusethis is fantastic i wish i could write a poem like this but im getting mediocre since i keep taking breaks with my writing and im never getting better lol =P keep it up |
| Somewhere In Between 2006-10-12 ch 1, | abuseWow. Now this.. this is real poetry. I wish I could write like this! It's beautiful. I love the rhyme scheme and just everything. Topic. Expression. Everything. --Alex |
| wilko4523 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abuseWow really kl thanx for posting on mine by the way nice hugs yay Sir Wilko |
| Kouichi 2006-10-10 ch 1, | abuseWow, the flow of the poem cought me off guard, this is some good stuff. |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2006-10-04 ch 1, | abuseThsi was really pretty. Nicely flowing in a mysterious way, truly gifted piece of work. ~the Stranger in the moonlight |
| Leaving Here 2006-09-25 ch 1, | abuseO i like it! |
| Little Junkie 2006-09-25 ch 1, | abusehehe very neat! I liked some of the words you used. cute and creative. come visit me again, i gotz more stuff ta read:):) |
| Angelic Hellraiser 2006-09-22 ch 1, | abuseDude thanks for the review and this is awesome! I like the rhyming and the beat... totally cool! |
| JoshuaVanity 2006-09-21 ch 1, | abuse~Hai!!This poem is awesome. nay your such an awesome writer ((JEALOUSY/ENVY)) KayTalk laterbye X3 JOSH |
| Guess 2006-09-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love it once again... beautiful ! |
| The Melancholy Cocoa Bean 2006-09-18 ch 1, | abuseo this seems so deep, yet so laden with irony. i really like this - the imagery is splattered everywhere. 'under the glimmer of the haggled fears' keep it up :) |