The title does fit the poem, except that it is more direct than the much subtler language of the poem. You might consider making the title more cryptic.

hehe, this is a good poem. I really liked it. Keep writing.

i think maybe just : "false" might work, but yeah it does go.

this is...just incredible. you have such great choice of wording, its cut back to the bare simpliest making this stunningly effective. "colourful girl, red and white striped dress" i love it, truly its just sharp and vivid image after another. I love: "garbed up" is it a made up word? if so i love ot even more because its such a perfect description. anyway, great poem.

I like the detail of "lips pink and chapped." Great visual. I also like that you put "glitter" in italics. It does make the word look...glittery. I don't know that I necessarily like the last line. And maybe that's just because it's "don't mess up" following a line that uses "impress." Hmm. I don't know if the title does go with the poem, now that you mention it. The only thing that would suggest that in the poem is the use of the word "mask." You'll figure something out. You know more about what's going on in this poem than I do. Keep writing! :)

Gorgeous, and beautifully writen. I adored the title-and the piece was beautiful. Yhe great part was-the title isn't used anywhere in the piece and I was expecting something completely different from this piece after I saw it. But then, BAMB, straight out of left field, and I was left reeling. Beautiful imagery, and I love the phrasing you used.

I'd say more, but I'm a bit tired and can't really articulate my thoughts.

♥ Alice

The title goes with the poem, but the poem is sparkly and shimmery, whereas the title is kind of drab in comparison.

Loved the first two stanzas. =)

♥Christine

I like the shatterred harsh fragility of this. And with that said, i think that the title uses two soft words, "false", and "face", when it may be better served with one harsh and one soft or vice versa. You manuever through such drastic differences like, "voice cracked"-harsh, "lips pink'-soft, and "black box phenomenon"-harsh, "window of her soul", -soft, You've developed a very affective pattern with the contrast, that's the only reason why I'd say use that contrast in the title to indicate or foreshadow the wonderful layering that you achieve later. Apologize if this doesn't make sense. I like what you've done with the drastic contrasts. Well written.

very intricate and pretty. interesting to read, your style has really developed. ~*♥

mirror images i think

The title matches the poem to some extent. I like both the title and the poem, though. You've got a cool writing style.