yes.

Really. Like this.

I haven't been on fictionpress in a few months, so I was just reading all the stuff of yours I missed, and now, Iris Early, I remember what a national treasure you are.

Very interesting style, its like listening to a cockney taxi driver reeling off a monologue about a confused smack hed.

Is that what you were going for?

lol, good job.

Alan.

That was really good. I cant write short stories. Keep it up.

yeah, pretty damn illegal...iz x

i feel sorry for the cold, blue girlfriend. and also elliot, who is cool, like the story ) x

That was twisted, insane, and to put it bluntly, fucking awesome. Also: a)very kool, that narration style; b) the name Elliot rocks more than a pile of free Snickers. Great job man.

I thought this was wonderfully done. It seemed really erratic, and funny, and now I think I'm rambling.

There's a few missed spaces but FP has been known to do that.

-biieruesu

Can you guess what I'm going to say first? Yep, it was gripping... Very nicely written, in a matter-of-fact style that you seem to pull off well several times on FP. I liked it enough to be drawn in properly, and that doesn't happen an awful lot. Loved the offhand statement about the hole in her head.

In general, brilliantly written, and any more like this will be very well recieved... Yeah, there's a few missing spaces here and there, but it's kind of pointless pointing it out, because if you took it down, you'd lose my review, and that just wouldn't do.

Great writing, one of my favourites.

Scrunchy