i like this a lot.

I like it, could be a good song, well done.

Bittwah, Fading Innocence's review was so long, I just had to read it, and it made me crack.

They've a good point.

Anyhoo, I love the sporadic ryhmes. It adds a nice touch. (Or it would if I could spell). :P

Cheers once again,
Venom

loved this one. [Black driedmothwing dresses] - i can imagine what they'll feel like. [Butterfly wing masks, covering up features].. wow. masks with butterfly wing designs.

was it intentional that the shape of the poem resembles a cocoon? it kind of looks like one to me. i like shape poems :]

Hmm. It's pretty good. Perhaps average for you, though. This isn't as good as some of your other poems, so don't put a link to it in your profile. I think there's a typo in the first line, or is it intentional?

I liked the lines "Butterfly wing masks,covering up features-" especially.

P.S. I ask because OBVIOUSLY your poetry is great enought to be published and you have enough for a good-sized book. And all you need to do is find an agent that specializes in your kind of poetry--tragic, beautiful, words so sweet and flowery they melt on your tongue yet they spin such a fiery tale...argh! I can't stop lapsing into poetry! Damn it, I was planning to use those words for a future poem...oh well. I might as well anyway.

Once your reviewers have selected some of your best poems (like I said, Alice Say Goodbye to Rabbit is a good one and so is Writer's Block), print them, put them into an envelope, send it off to a couple of agents, and see if they take them! (Of course, someone's got to. Who could refuse such gorgeous poetry?)

I can just imagine the cover now...from a distance it looks like a child's fairy tale, a little blonde girl with baby-blue eyes and a cute little dress slipping into the rabbit hole...but upon closer look, Alice's eyes are red and she's crying blood, and demons are screaming at the bottom of the rabbit hole, and held between the Cheshire Cat's grin is a severed rabbit head...oh I'm so morbid. Wonder if I should stop reading poetry like this?

You're right, I shouldn't.

Even if you decide you're not going to put the effort into finding an agent that thinks your poetry could be published, I probably will...mwahahaha, I'll email them or contact them in some way or another, send them the link to your Fictionpress, and watch them run to tell all the editors they know about little Alice and her gorgeous emotions still clinging to paper...

GOTTA STOP TALKING IN POETRY!

~Fading Innocence

'dazzle me with your hypocrisy'

"pain" -- i love that song. jimmy eat world is one of my favorite bands. i listen to a lot of music, so chances are we like the same bands. quizilla, i have a deviantart account now, a fanfiction account and this one, that's pretty much all i have. i'm not starting to get over it, i'm just going over old memories because things are changing quickly and it's all starting to hurt again. it isn't a bad time to talk at all -- i need someone now more than ever ... you are not boring, you are not stupid, you are not shallow. i've read your poetry and learned about you through your reviews and you seem like an amazing person. if you really want to get to know me, then i'd like to talk with you more but i have to warn you that no part of me is glamorous or beautiful and you'll probably regret it. i'd also love to try and be friends, even though i can't e-mail you, which would be a lot easier ... and i adore your writing, i hope you realize how much talent you have. but i know you don't, and i just wish i could make you see it.

thank you for all your gorgeous reviews -- they made me smile.

♥ alison

ps. i should have a shitload of new poetry updated soon ...

Hmm, interesting, different.

Hmm. This was Really good. You worded it very well. Diforent for you. I like.

Love, Ellen

...Is this mike under me? LOL

This one reminds me of the grim reaper, in that it talks about another world that it takes you to, I rather liked it, keep up the good work.

lovely imagery,great use of language.i don't rhyme -- i gave up on that concept.in some places the rhyming was a bit off,but was mostly gorgeous.