dudee I totally did a problem like this in class last year.
Except it was a little bit different, but not much.
That was pre-algebra. c: it makes me feel smart that I learned that while people are learning it in algebra 2

more! more! more! which of these stories will you prioritze and finish first? :) onegai.. can't stop reading your stories. so good.

I forgot to add this in the fourth review-and since this is a prolog (though a very humoris one) I will mention it here.
You asked about the song that inspied Anna and Molly's names?
It wouldnt happen to be Anomaly, from Incubus, now would it?

“It’s not like I’d have a chance with him, even if he was gay. Or bi, or whatever. He’s high school royalty, and I’m the high school counterculture. I’m a witch, I’m gothic, and I’m gay. People see my pentacle, they see the way I dress, and they think ‘Satanist’. People find out that I’m gay, and they think ‘**’. Imagine if God started dating the Antichrist. It’s just not supposed to happen, it’s not going to happen. Noel would never be interested in me.”
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That right there is the greatest paragraph for the chapter, and this,

Imagine if God started dating the Antichrist.

Is the greatest analogy I have ever read, seen, heard of in my short life. The way you have written this entire story so far is incredible, the way the dialog flows together so well with the description, the pictures you create-you are in fact creating a living portrait with words. When the characters speak, you get the sense of their connection, that they have been friends for years-or-as when Corbin speaking with Noel, that there is an underling nervousness. It shifts from situation, which is exactly what it should do in a good story-but you see, some books I’ve read don’t do it nearly as well as you do.
I loved how you addressed the way society is in this chapter.
People still fear what they don’t understand, and what they fear they shun-or so it seems. I was having a conversation with my mom the other day and she (being the horrific homophobe she is) made the comment that in her day “Gays kept it to themselves. They hid it, because they new they would be persecuted if they were snuffed out. We had people to keep them in line in my time.” And of coarse, I had to un-tactfully tell her that it’s the same today, if not worse.
Oh!
And Meiling!
Sweet sweet Meiling!! Hahaah, I love her. I love her and her picture of Noel and Corbin, and I love her energetic little persona, and the way she is so obviously indulged in yaoi. She makes comments similar to my own, I have to admit-because any chance I get to manipulate two (or more) of my boyfriends into making out, I take.
This chapter reminded me of a roller-coaster (over used analogy but…) It started off slow and suddenly plummeted into a humorous rush-twisting and turning and all that fun stuff-before sort of slowing down to let just a little angst in.
Oh-and I remembered after reviewing chapter ‘five’ that it was four and that this it three. X_X

Uh-oh.
That’s right- I have a Fiction press account now. Prepare yourself for overly long, detailed reviews on not one, but two sights my dear Magick.
I also want to give you my sinserist applogys for not reviewing anything in such a long, long time. A lot of stuff has been going on, and I've found myself to have little time to do the things I love, namly write and read.
But at the moment, I've managed to get some time to myself-and there for am going on a MASSIVE reveiw marathon!
Prepare your email for overflow.
After I read your last AR, I decided to click on the link to your home page (I had no idea what Fictionpress was at the time) and- lo-and-behold- you write original stories! I don’t think my voice has ever made such a high, girlish shriek of glea as it did that day. I’ve read most of your stories- and have my favorite’s picked out so far as:
Heavenward
The living dead
Peaces and Cream
Verstehen
Broken Fermata
Insanity Is just a State of Mind

I know the last two are oneshots- but I adore them to death- which is why I’m reviewing the fifth chapter of Verstenhen first. I was MORE than thrilled to see Yumi and Souta as teenagers-and an item! I love Souta, love love love him, and his rainbow scarf. The little image in my head of him, has come to be a slender, incredibly sexy Japanese boy with those thin framed glasses- the kind that Soubi works so damn well in Loveless.
*cough*
Getting back to the review now…
I liked how you added more characters to the story-it was seemless-a very well written transition that didnt just slap something else on there, but added it to the benifit of the tale. I loved Souta's outburst, as well as the character reactions around him. Your really good at keeping everyone in character- it shows at times like these- when people are having diffrent responsces to the disrution. Corbun just sort of sat there and tuned it out best he could, while Souta got up and said something, and Kely just laughed.

Oh, and the twin brother quip?

Lovely.
Simply, wonderful.
You know, I hope you get published someday so I can read this in paperback.
And have you sign it.
You've become something of a muse for me, and I can only hope to evolve into a writting with half the skill you have.

Cute. I like this story. I can't wait to see the direction it's heading in.

I've noticed your chapter titles are t.A.T.u. lyrics of Not Gonna Get Us. ^_^ I like that band a lot. Please update soon. :D

I like the twins. :D

(ah more evil girls)

Nice work. Corbin needs a *snuggly* though. Like how you did up the chakra/ meditation too. Keep it up, hope you get another chapter or two out soon

Heheheh.

I would say that God should date the Antichrist, but wouldn't that be his grandson or something? Since he created Lucifer...

"He wants to stab his pencil through the paper, just spear his notebook and kill it with the grace of a Neanderthal. After realizing that he’d compared himself to a caveman, he decides that it’s time to ask for help."

Caveman!

I approve.

Yey!

Why are there annoying girls in it? Ar. *chews on you*

Lol--I remember that part in the movie XD that was a funny movie (just ijagine all these girls sitting around being pervy and wqatching it--horrible ain't it? XD)I like Coldplay...>.>XD Nice chapter.

Heh, this is a pretty good beginning. It's kind of original too. I'm guessing you'll update soon...? ^_^

So I know they were quoting the entire time...but this is one of the most original openings to a slash story I've read in a while. I'm completely intrigued and excited to see how it develops.

Good timing for the 'injured cry', although it does seem to be for the game. Well written, I'll enjoy watching this unfold