I was just wondering if you are ever going to finish this on here. I know it has been awhile since you updated so it is probably a no but just thought i would ask.
~Tyer

Why is chapter one labled chapter two?
Not really a comment but I thought you should addres this.

Very engaging. The idea of VR out of control may not be a new one, but your application of it is a good one.A little more background would be helpful. For instance, what is so special about a Logic-A? Why do players get addicted? Things like that need to be addressed eventually.Overall, good start. I'm looking forward for a continuation in the near future.

phantom_jedi

Excellent from start to...hmm, should i call it the finish?

this was a gripping read, with a seductively styled futuristic world. Conversely, you didnt go out of your way to set it up. very good.

One minor point of contest. chapters. you put six chapters up as one document. now they were good chapters but fp.com does have the ability to upload chapters one at a time. in the future, i suggest you do this. though this is a very good story, the excessive length of a single page may put people off reading it.

Quinn.