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| onyxdragonflyy 2006-09-25 ch 1,   | 0_0... now i'm getting worried... should I be? This is not the normal flow that i have come to expect.. ~T^T~ Is there something you're not telling me? bah... you're words are really powerful here.. they show more of a perverted vulgar nature.. but i guess so is the guise of vanity. I would say colorful imagery, but harsh tones comes more to mind. I'm not really sure what to make of this one.. for is it sort of shocking. If that's what you were going for, then kudos to you! You got me! Either way, you have gotten you're point across in this... and you do have a way with words my dear. Now I feel the need to write something... |
| Mienaku 2006-09-21 ch 1, | I love the part about"alive with hate, disappointment"I love the sublte undertone of self-hate and lack of self-confidence the voice of this poem give off! |
| Femme de Dieu 2006-09-20 ch 1, | I liked your summary, "my knees hurt" made me laugh cynically, because I hear ya! We all feel we MUST buy into this, or else be seen as ugly...when as you bring to the fore, it is vanity itself that is the hideous beast! And really, what does being vain get us? Nothing in the long run. For once that which made us vain has faded, we are left alone with nothing but that dreaded mirror and "waves of disbelief to mingle with the vain and ugly." Excellent encapsulation! Truly, Tourterelle |