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| Not Human 2007-01-16 ch 1,  | abuseWow...I like that you made mention of Daddy being a little crazy when he drinks. I also love the way you wrote from a child's perspective! It was seamless. I can't think of any criticisms to offer, except that of course a normal man would probably not jump to the conclusion that his small child killed his wife, but we've already covered that her father is not normal. The only thing I can suggest is perhaps to make a bigger deal of his madness. Great story! |
| Dorkasaurus 2006-09-21 ch 1, | abuseThis is an excellent story. It's really well-written. Good job! |
| tears of emerald 2006-09-21 ch 1, | abusePoor annabelle! What happened to her Mother? This is a creepy, disturbing, great story! |
| Gaki Toki 2006-09-20 ch 1, | abusePretty creepy. But in a dark way, my sick side smiles and my fluffy side cringes. That's what I always love...that's why I read Stephen King...and nonfiction forensic books. I love feeling sick and bubbly at the same time. Maybe that's why people watch scary movies, maybe everyone feels that way when they get scared or something. Gaki |
| Mireille Caelarily 2006-09-20 ch 1, | abuseOuch. Absolutely marvelous, very painful, eerie in its innocence. well done. |