Nice conflict between the light and the dark! I really liked the 2nd stance, I got a really good mental picture of the darkness taking over. Really cool poem!
Its great. i like this a lot and it has a great meaning to relate to. a good job on setting it up and it is true the points you make in the poem...well the whole thing has great points. keep writing!
You do an interesting job in creating a serious conflict between light and shadow. Some of the rhyming, however, feels a bit sketchy and the rhythm is jagged. If you want to rhyme, try to fix the pacing to make the poem flow better. Good imagery and concept, though. Good job.
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