Wow. Brief and full of impact, like a heartbeat itself. Despite the fairytale cast to it, it resembles some form of a nightmare - mindless pattern and conformity. Very interesting. "At regular intervals, six streets shot off in different directions, like spokes on a wheel" - good imagery.

Definitely have the 'descriptive' part downpat. Your descriptions were perfect and the choice of words you used for them fit really well.

Couldn't really make much of the story though. A bit odd... but that could also be because of the major hayfever I'm struggling with :P

Glad to see you writing.