COOL! I SO loved this one.
And that says a lot, because I'm real picky about vampire poems.
But this one I loved.

Say, could you check out my poems?
You don't have to if you don't want to :D

I liked the poetry, it was pretty cool, although some of it seemed choppy and uneven - until I read the note following, which explains it to be a song. I understand. I would love to hear the words in song instead of just being words. The idea is strong and well-presented.

It reminds me a lot of Anne Rice's The Vampire Lestat and The Queen Of The Damned, which are two of the best books I think I've ever read. Very nice.

-stixerz-

i LOVE this one! it's so sweet in its own way and beautifully written to be dark.
i love the vampire-references to the fountain of youth^.^
btw, you said at the bottom that it's a song, well when i was reading this, a style to sing it popped into my head^.^
it's a Panic!At the Disco typed theme but maybe i'll sing it for you later to see if you like it. idk, maybe.
well, as all of your work, i love this one too

hmm was the rhyming intentional? but anyway, it really helped the whole flow of the poem. it made me feeling like some dance was going on. or a waltz... hmm. okay the whole effect of the poem was kind of weird. it was like dark, yet light-hearted. (to me) yet in a way that is logical. (okay I think I'm not making any sense here) and honestly, I loved the last stanza. it was a brilliant ending. (: keep writing! (duh)

and I'll definitely be more careful about my author's notes! (:

"and how does it feelto dance with a demon,who loves you as much as he loves your blood?"

wow.i love this. great imaginary, flow, everything. great work. ~Bex xx

btw, i was reading alice in wonderland last night and it gave me nightmares xD

sweet, sexy, nice and interesting. well done. love the romantical dance this portrays ;) great job

incredible. you're an amazing writer.

I love this, it's beautiful.

i love this. great. brilliant. beautiful. id really appreciate if you had a look at some of my work.. no pressure of course. peace adn love from holly.

not a bad piece. not my type really, but structurely(?) it seems ok. some good images, love the last stanza

I agree with you, this would sound better as a song. I agree with you as well when you say that there are stanza's that I enjoyed... hell I AGREE WITH YOU!

'I am one with the world/and one with things imagined/

I don't know why, but I love those lines. This is different from your other poems. I like it.

My favourite one is 'Sick Little Suicide'.

Have a wonderful day, darling.

I love the idea. love how you captured it, love how it was worded. sorry about your friend. it's a beautiful poem, would make a good song, definitely.

"and how does it feel to dance with a demon,who loves you as much as he loves your blood?"I love those 3 lines for some reason, its genius. Excellent work.

~*HauntedMisery*~

alice, you know i love all your poetry, but if you want titles of your best ... here's what i think are the best you've posted on here.

'alice, say goodbye to rabbit''pain is perfection''it's alive''you'll never know''garbage''heartstrings''i think i'm falling apart''rabbit hunt''the sky is falling''the truth hurts''betrayal''a close call''is hate contagious''butterfly''broken wings''crush me''empty hearts''suffocating''alice''smile''barbie's fate''tear into me with razorblades''color me beautiful' 'you don't know me'

i'm probably biased when it comes to some of this, but these are my favorites of yours, and what i consider your best. all your writing is amazing, but these are the ones i love the most.