Nice. All your "there"s need to be 'their's, but otherwise the grammar is okay. I don't know what this one is about per se, whether it is fantastical or not, whether the "boy" is good or evil, but the imagry is very good and the story is very strange. It could be a metaphor, yes, that both love and apocalypses drain the teenager of emotion. That, we think, is what we seek, but it can also be taken away, making us craters.

Again, nice job.

I absolutely adore this. Incredible piece. :)

Wow! Amazing imagry! "We cried as the night reined down and shatteredInto a million pieces that scattered across the lines in your faceAnd our tears froze hitting the ground so hard that it shook." I LOVE those lines! Great work and definatley keep writing