Her story is sad. It sounds like a lot of peer pressure was exerted on her to make her that way. Good job!

~Twilight Starr~

Hmm, I'm not too sure what I think of this yet. I do like it, though. It was interesting reading about a passive character. The dice metaphor was neat, although it could've been worked in somewhere else...

I also like her ever-changing nicknames. I *adore* KitKats, XD

The only section I didn't think worked well was "Kate" (although I did like how she got that name accidentally). It was a little overdramatic, and then she was so happy with Neil at the end. It was hard to buy. Also, all the adverbs (silkily, angrily, etc.) made my eye twitch. We understand how Neil is talking without them. I liked the wistful, depressed tone of the rest of the prose, though.

Nice work overall!