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| Aimers 2006-09-22 ch 1,  | abuseI liked the ending, but I have issues with the rest of this. First off, you should really run grammar-check on this work. Secondly, instead of using dividers, try putting the "flashbacks" in context. This way, it'll flow better. The last sentence, however, is purely delicious. Keep on writing! =) |