wow! this is a huge offload... there's so much for me to take in as i read it. maybe that's a bad thing, but personally i would never have been able to pour so much into something like this! so good work for that. it is however pretty confusing the way you have really long verses because it doesn't really give our eyes a break. but anyway, keep writing, i think it's a great thing for people to be able to express emotion in such an artistic way! i would really appreciate it if you had a look at some of my work, i've just uploaded a lot and i'm looking for some feedback! no pressure, of course. Peace and love from Holly.