Oh. So sad and sweet! It's odd how there are so many stories of the Irish where the woman struggles and the man drinks away all the money, be they husband and wife or brother and sister. You did a very good job!

I know what you said about the grammar thing (which would be damn annoying), and I know I'm going to seem like an annoying teacher, but there is one thing. "Blah blah blah," said someone... usually there's a comma at the end, not a full stop. "Blah blah blah." Said someone isn't grammatically correct.

Ok, feel free to hate me now.

Apart from that, brilliant writing, as per usual!

I liked it... spellings made it a little tough, but once I started to get the hang of the words it got easier.

The sibling interaction is nice. Makes me wonder if Charlie will stay on the straight and narrow... and what happens if he doesn't.

Wow, I'm really impressed. The Irish accent-writing made it a bit confusing but all the more realistic. You could almost hear them saying the words! Good job.

However, you might have wanted to add more of a plot. The "Sunday Mass" part was great because you involved another character, but it almost seemed too long for how much plot there was. If you could have perhaps added in another side story it might have fixed it up a bit. Flashback could have worked too...

Overall, great job!