Wow... don't know what to say... brilliant. I love PotO... poor Erik.

bb xx K.A.

Yes, this made me think of the Phantom, too. I loved this poem. I can so definitely relate to it, especially how I've been feeling and thinking lately... yes, this poem is so true. Excellent.

this one I really like.

There's nothing quite like the tragedy of not being loved and the words you use convey the feeling really well. A song unsung looses it's form, a flower that doesn't bloom slowly rots away from the inside...

may the force be with you 6_6

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M, now this, I like very much; definitely a favorite. It's layout and writing was so great, and the idea behind it is just ingenious. Very well done.

Thanks much for checking out my story, The Eternal Flame: The New World. Dunno if you have already and just not reviewed, but if you haven't, read The Eternal Flame first, though you probably already have. Thanks a ton, though!

aka Lupine

Hm. I really do like the content of this poem. And let me say this, I just loved the movie. It was truely beautiful (*coughs* Like your poem...) I really like the idea behind it. The ending was quite final and I like that. I could 'hear' the music behind the words. Great job!

I love this poem. It's kind of interesting that you change from "one who cannot be loved" to "one who believes he cannot be loved". Kind of gives it a little hope, don't you think? Thanks for reviewing my story, and keep up the good work. I'm gonna author alert you. -Sakka-Fenikkusu

Nicely written. I can see why this is a favourite of yours. Awesome job!!

p.s. thanks for your review and pointing out the typo =)

This is the first poem I've read in a while that i actually like.

Very nicely written, I liked this. Great work and keep writing.

I don't normally rate poetry, but I liked this one. The idea was good and fresh. Here are my thoughts:

I think you need to work on your syllable count. Line three of the first stanza has 7 syllables where the other three have 8.

I also think the third stanza could be tightened a little. Take out some of the unnecessary words to make it flow better. Here's my attempt:Like a song broken off mid-breath,Like a flower cruelly trampled,Like a sun forever clouded,So is one who believes he cannot be loved. (If you can think of any way to shorten this line and still keep the format, it might work better.)

So what kind of stories do you write?

Yay for similes and metaphors!Another masterful job for you. It is short and to the point, but beautifully written. Simple, but brimming with meaning. I can't come up with anything for CC for you now...so I will only sing your praises. Wonderful poem! I hope to see more from you!~SCR

I love Phantom of the Opera, and this is beautiful. So many are like the Phantom (who kicks Raoul's wimpy butt, by the way); the Phantom is an extreme version of half of the feelings I had yesterday. This poem is interesting, and I love the similarity between the two stanzas. This is great. Keep writing!

Thanks for your review. The story was inspired by the books Fahrenheit 451 and Uglies. I don't write much sci-fi ish stuff, but that's similar to the new story I'm typing.

Great work.

-Xero