I love the cadence to this! My favorite is:

Brigades of laughing buildings gather
As she escapes the yielding batter
Walking slow when heart beats shorten
The praise in question is never certain

cheesee, i really love this poem

This is so pretty.
I think I'm going to read your stuffs tomorrow instead of doing Bio. homework.
Maybe I'll even open a fictionpress account--one more step to world domination! Mwhahah.
I mean...

i love it! it reminds me of a friend from once upon a time... hmm.. you might of sparked something there..

i like this. the lines about "birgades if laughiing building gather" are my favourite. your totally random comment giver,katylew

...I kinda like it.

:) CD

Wonderful motion and atmosphere to this. I like the off rhyme and halted rhytmn of this work. Very visual, and haunting in a way. Well written.

Stars do capture the imagination. Great poem.

Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~

I love the rhyming, especially in the first stanza. The only thing I have to say is that I a bit confused; i dont understand how the title and the poem relate to eachother. (I am probably the only person on fp who doesnt understand the title anyway) so once again another brilliant creation from trash_can_art. keep it coming.

Trash can art, you are one of my favorite people on earth, this only proves how sweet and talented you truly are...Zerlina is awesome too. That was well worth reading, thanks for making my day.