Like Kaggr I'm very curious to see what Shay's like later on, how he reads the letter, or what his adoptive parents are like. I think that the letter itself would be lost in a novella, but it would be interesting to maybe just see a few sentences here and there as Shay's reactions to what his mother has said.
I like that you didn't use the stereotype that teen mothers are drug-addicts and have horrible writing. Like with not mentionning the father, you've left good blanks for the reader to fill in themselves.
Touching, haunting and beautiful.
Keep it up. =)
- ignorance.

you are an artist.

Wow, that was amazing. I almost cried... Great job, I loved it.

Wow. A heartbreaking piece. Your word choice is flawless and this is very well written. Charlotte seems very wise for someone who's only seventeen and you portrayed the person she is very well without saying too much. There is so much more I want to say about this piece but I just can't seem to find the words so I'm just going to tell you that you did an excellent job. Well done!

This was weird for me because I actually know someone named Charlotte Burke. Scary.
This was good, very heartfelt, which I somehow get the vibe that you weren't going for that and you didn't exactly expect to hear that in a review, but nonetheless...

-Irony

That was so beautiful, and I can really imagine someone writing it. I think I might cry now... not because of anything bad, but the catharsis (I love that word!) I felt. Thank you.

great work. you make this letter sound real and heartfelt. it is incredible sad, but on the other sides there are parts that would make one smile in another context. i really enjoyed it. (the latin too ^^)

Well written. It makes me think of the letter, though unread, that my adopted brother's biological mother wrote him. I have no idea what's in it, but I imagine it is something quite different than this. Anyway, I enjoyed it. :)

So good. Tugs right at your heartstrings... wow; I can't even IMAGINE having to do that, to go through that, beyond my scope for imagination. I have writen teenage pregnancies, but nothing this heartfelt. I love it; You have a real talent, my friend.
--Annie

Very touching, and an interesting idea. I'd be very curious to see how Shay reads this letter later on, or what his adoptive parents are like. It's a wonderful piece on it's own, but it would also go well with a complete story.

Wow! What a touching story, I almost cried. Beautifully done. Keep writing for you have talent. God Bless ya.

*wipes away the tears* Oh, this is heart-breakingly magnificent...do you know just what a beauty you've created?

Laters,

KD

What can I say? What can I say that won't be horribly ordinary spouting of "Good work!" when it's true, but sounds so weak, lol? I think I am particularly biased in reading this letter, of course (I was kind of, sort of, very slightly in a similar situation to Shay, though nothing this extreme), but in any case, you definitely show wisdom beyond your years in writing this (holy cliche! lol). Really, excellent work, Anna.

Oh, wow. That's incredible. It's really sad, and intense, and... wow. Now I'm speechless. This is amazing writing. It's has emotion, and feeling, and power. Great job. Wow...

Wow! Excellent wisdom. That is one masterfully-written story and it's so original! (I know what you're thinking - "see C.S. Lewis quote") Amazing job! No spelling errors, perfect grammar, beautiful wording, profound theme - 5 out of 5 stars! You are indeed a professional, Orual.

I only have one criticism: It seems a bit too well-written to have been done by a seventeen-year-old. On that note, however, you are only sixteen (that baffles me), so I suppose it's more accurate than I would have thought. Keep up the wonderful literature!