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| Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-04-30 ch 1,   | As another reviewer said its an interesting take on Hepheusteus and Aphrodite's relationship, which is cool. I probably spelt Hepheusteus wrong :D |
| Michaela King 2007-10-21 ch 1, | I like this. It's an unusual take on the story; usually you'll find anger and hurt by the betrayal, but in here he couldn't seem more glad. The writing style is nice, too. |
| Lady Katreina 2007-08-27 ch 1, | What a lovely relief! I like the way you went with Hephaestus's feelings for his wife. Hera was even More adept than I thought she was for choosing Hephaestus as Aphrodite's husband! Regrettably I burst out laughing when I read V-Hip's review, the part about your second sentence sounding awkward. Honestly I learn most of my words by association while reading and not in conversation. (Like epitome -should- be pronounced epi-tome instead of e-pit-e-me, but anyways) I thought it worked perfectly. "She glitters as even I, the greatest smith any world has ever known, cannot make a gem emulate." He's not comparing her to gems, he's comparing gems to her. And even he, the best of the best, couldn't make a gem emulate her "glitter"yness. Thank you for writing this. |
| cassandra12271 2007-03-08 ch 1, | Very good. Although it would be better if you have some dialogue, but other than that I like it. |
| V-Hip 2006-09-30 ch 1, | A bit misogynistic, but that seems to be part of the point. It's an interesting take on the Aphrodite-Hephasteus story. Your second sentence sounds really awkward. "She glitters even as I cannot make a gem emulate"? The gem is actually glittering, it's not emulating glitter, so either she glitters on a scale that he could not make the gem emulate, or something of that sort. Perhaps even simply saying that she glitters more than his best-cut gem? Something of that sort. |