This is very unique. It seems to have an old presence. I love this.

Pretty powerful. I think this is definately one of your better poems. I think that you are really coming into your owm in terms of poetry. Your past poems have been great usually but this one seems to show a marked change from the poems of a promising youth to the poems of an adult and, if procrastination doesn't set in, one day perhaps a master. Congrats.

My only gripe would be it feels like it could be polished ever so slightly. But this by no means makes it less of a publishable poem.