your writing is sophisticated, mature, incredible. i wish i could write like you.

"but his words shifted mountains/to the likeness of his brows./judgemental" i thought those three lines were quite perfect.

-aly

Great poem! And hey, if you write best while sitting in a restaurant, go for it. A lot of writers go to coffee houses for a change of scenary.

I especially liked this line:

"... but his words shifted mountainsto the likeness of his brows."

Descriptive! I love it when people use comparisons, especially in their poetry. So many writers on fictionpress forget to do that.