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| Inu-midoriko 2007-01-26 ch 1,  | abusei liked it lots. The fact you were waiting for her to prove herself to you was kool. i would have given up but no, you waited. XD your so kool. |
| Crossing the Rubicon 2006-12-09 ch 1, | abuseI like the beginning of this (the first three lines, mainly) better than the beginnings of a few of your other poems. & I my favorite line is probably: "Now my box is empty & full of silence." "You said you wanted another chance / Were willing to prove your sincerity / Yet here I am still waiting / for the proof of your words" I think this would have more effect if you removed the line "for the proof of your words." The reader can already assume that that is what you're talking about, and brevity is a valuable poetic tool. Good work. :) |
| M.D.Irvine 2006-10-06 ch 1, | abusemixed signals! nothing i cant stand more than that. ppl say im extremely blunt, i say /blurt out what i think and i find it hard to figure out ppl esp when they r playing games with u |
| the sneaky weasel 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abusewaiting is often the hardest thing to do. i like this! |
| Thrice 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuse.. i'm going, i'm going... i have homework and projects and other ** going on... so sorry to make you wait but i'll try and get it up soon... promise |