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| Emotionless Crystal 2006-10-06 ch 1,  | abuseThis would really make an awesome song. The rhyming, the message, wow! If I could figure out the tune it'd be stuck in my head. (Thx for the review) |
| Ashayla Noel 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuseWow...I think this would make an excellent song. You should record it with someone. I'll bet it sounds great. |
| Mienaku 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuseStrikingly written. I like how it gives off the feeling of despairing hope. "How many times God will it takeFor this creature to understandI'm breaking down by their own hand" Loved these lines. I also like how you ended it. Like someone who's drowning but can't seem to reach out. It'd be interesting to hear what type of music you would put this to. |