Id like to know the story behind this if youd like to tell me. Just message me on myspace or something. My link is under my 'homepage' thing on my profile.

"from blue to black,-and backward-my life fell into place:" was a priviledge to read. Just astounding sound to that stanza. I like the mixture of harsh and soft sounds that you've used to usher this along, and then slow it down with the hesitations. Wonderful image blast. Great write.

fell or stepped?

falling is so violently upsetting

lovely images used, and the words are nicely placed. good work. ~Bex xx

love it. 'i bid goodbye to childhood' i know that feeling so well, so i can completely empathise with this line.

'i tell myself: focus'- again, you write in a way that touches all your readers because you can relate to them all.

'centuries pass by...' - loved the imagery in those 3 words.

as for the last verse and the final line, just perfect. great work.

beautifully arranged. you are becoming so talented. :D ~*

it could have so many meanings-i tihnk that's what i like about. i've read it five times now and every time-it means something else, i take away something else, and that, dear, is why, even though i'm horrid at reviewing, i love to save your pieces as my late-night breakdowns.

Pleasantly chaotic and fast-paced. I loved the images it put into my head.

♥Christine