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| Solemn Coyote 2006-10-08 ch 1,   | "little bits of wind." Nice concept. I kinda like the idea of the weather being divisible. Aside from that, this poem pretty much fulfills the goal of a haiku: it captures a sensation and delivers it to the reader. |
| brokendreams21 2006-10-03 ch 1, | I wish I could post haikus. I would totally wish to post an entire collection but I'd get lazy. Anyways, wow. I really like the wintery theme in the haiku. However, the period in the second line I don't like. Just a preference thing. (Maybe a comma instead? Punctuation has never been my thing.) Still, beautifully written. Great job! |
| Magnolian Wolf 2006-10-03 ch 1, | Very nice! Haiku's are often very hard for me because they have to capture a season, and certain sylable count. As far as I can see, you did all correctly. You did a very good job, I had a mental image in my head of the storm. |
| Sakura Taking 2006-10-02 ch 1, | Nicely described. Keep it up! |
| Basara 2006-09-29 ch 1, | I remember the past storm that hit our country...man it ANNOYED me MUCH! then the news said that there's an another storm hitting our country this monday! T.T nice... |
| softlycryingrain 2006-09-29 ch 1, | Nice haiku, its a lovely little snapshot of description. |
| Guardrail 2006-09-27 ch 1, | Nice imagry, I liked this a lot. Great work and write more. |
| hateandkill-D 2006-09-27 ch 1, | Cool. I really like this! Great job! |