you have a lovely choice of words. i especially like the optimism of the whole piece. keep writing -

I really like this. There are a lot of vivid images, but nothing seems unneccesary which is important. I like this: "Go rebuild castles markedly higher" a beautiful image of hope.

Is it just me, or does nobody with any talent write on these things? I really mean it. Yours is the only one I've seen in almost a year that is really poetic by it's nature. Everyone else is super forced. It's either 'vampires' this or 'angst' that, everything cliche and uninspired. Long story short: yours is not. Good job.