Reviews for Saga Of The White Sword

Moon's Poetess
2007-04-20
ch 1,

abuseI haven't read poetry like this in ages ^^ It flows beautifully, and apart from a few sentences that're a bit cheesy it's really awesome, 'cause I know how hard it is to avoid those kind of sentences XD Anyway, I'll give one negative; it dragged me along until this line: "Neither wind nor flame could quench", which made me halt and read it again. But otherwise... great, love it.

Moon's Poetess

Tambreo
2006-09-27
ch 1,

abuseThis is an amazing poem. Truly. It had real presence, real hard taste. The rhythm was excellent-- even on the first reading I barely missed a beat, and that's impressive that I was allowed to do that. The rhymes felt flawless, and they were not contrived at all. In fact, I enjoyed the story just as much as the wordplay. You have something great here. Be glad of it! Wonderful job.

I have one, single qualm. The first line is awkward. It's probably the only one. 'Now hear of sword' just does not sound right. Even though the beat would be slightly off, I think 'the sword' would feel better. Or maybe put something different there altogether. I almost forgot about it by the end, but when I first began the poem (not knowing what was to follow) it felt like a major flaw.

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