|Reviews for butter boy|
| demonlovesong 6/2/08 . chapter 3
i love it.
| in a jar pk 2/1/07 . chapter 1
all three are beautiful...filled with such vivid imagery. as usual lol. i love your work. x
| no.peace.los.angeles 11/9/06 . chapter 1
Oh, sad. I love the phrases "blue morning light" and "beer breath lies." They're so classic and interesting. Beautiful poem. Keep writing! :)
| myno 11/1/06 . chapter 1
I like it. I don't know what else to say. Not breath-taking, but a basically good poem.
| simpleplan13 10/30/06 . chapter 3
sad ending... I love how it combined the first two pieces... powerful and amazing
| simpleplan13 10/30/06 . chapter 2
him breath her name... breathe
I love that line (typo and all).. the whole test thing is beautifully described
| simpleplan13 10/30/06 . chapter 1
aw sad ending and beautifully written
| having reached closure 10/12/06 . chapter 1
absolutely gorgeous, i always love those poems where people can combine words in such amazing ways that seem impossible. i admire you, really. your poetry is wonderful.
ps: hah, i was listening to the song that you have lyrics to at the end of your profile, that amused me.. hah
pps: thank you so much for that really long review, it made me very happy :)
| Aimee Raven 10/2/06 . chapter 3
Oh...touché..the last stanza. *god*. There are really no words. I don't know, it's just the way you put it. Fantastic. I like the title too btw "Butter boy" its interesting...keep up the brilliantness! Love, Mia
| Aimee Raven 10/2/06 . chapter 2
:-( very tragic...perhaps the star and sand allusion slightly cliché, but very effective nevertheless..."listening to him breathe her name over and over again in his sleep" beautiful. and of course, the last line...Love, Mia
| Aimee Raven 10/2/06 . chapter 1
I can't believe I didn't review this. Oh well. I think it's a very peculiar, unique piece...your usual style and choice of words, but so...ethereal somehow..the lies and the blue morning light. I loved "pleading druken slurs that sound almost like I love you" the most. Great work!
| Aquafied 10/1/06 . chapter 3
well ha ha ha
who's laughing now
| Aquafied 10/1/06 . chapter 2
reminds me of pregnancy tests
and thats about all
| Aquafied 10/1/06 . chapter 1
but in the blue morning lightone by one she watches themrealise it was all beer breath lies-honesty is the best policy
| ketmie 9/27/06 . chapter 3
Wow. This whole thing is really beautiful. Aah... I can't get over it. Amazing.