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Reviews For: Skipping deeply

not sure yet 2006-10-24 ch 1,	abusethe last line seemed worded a bit awkwardly to me, other than that its a pretty well put together little poem, i really love the breastbone to breastbone and the stanza that starts with sip it like medication...and turf the color of hair was interesting too, cause for some reason it mademethink of hair the color of turf...but then i got confused with myself, anywayz muchly nice, excellent job
japenease gum 2006-10-12 ch 1,	abusewow this fits so smoothly and perfectly...its really something...amazing. images dark and exciting and yet intimate incredible
sunday night sky 2006-10-12 ch 1,	abuseBeautiful. You have such a wonderful, unique style. Every line is amazing, I would quote but... too much... lol! Great piece :D
Farrie 2006-10-08 ch 1,	abuseAmazing imagery as usual. Keep up the good work.
breezy nostrils 2006-10-05 ch 1,	abusei don't know why...but i thought the title was skinning deeply lol...trick of the eye. i don't quite understand this...but maybe it's cause i woke up way too early. anyway, interesting comparisons. and btw...i like mentally migrated better :P
Aquafied 2006-10-04 ch 1,	abuseStood in your shade, Ican't be alone.-how deliciously wonderful actually i am usually infatuated with what you write (infatuated sounds obsessive, stalkerish. ah ha ha. i havent talked to you in quite a time. i remember when we used to make obscenely long comments i remember a lot of things)
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-10-03 ch 1,	abuse...Filthy... I think... but effortless genius. As usual. =o) xuncazoidx
Completely Incomplete 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseA very interesting poem. I like the words you use, and the imagery is excellent. Keep up the good work. ~Nyght
Guardrail 2006-09-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is very vividly written, I like this a lot. I especially love the line, "Moaning never sounded so thick,". This is really great, definately keep writing.
Faithless Juliet 2006-09-28 ch 1,	abuse“Moaning never sounded so thick,/jump-rope/connect/-ing, breastbone to breastbone.” - I really like that; I’ve been playing with the idea of ‘moaning’ for a while now. I like your idea of it’s thickness. I wrote a poem about how moans roll from groins to throats, and the whole bodily connection between pleasure. “Stood in your shade, I/can't be alone.” - I get that, I’ve always been more of the shade that other people stand in though. The ending is interesting, kind of sudden - I would have thought that you would have drawn the poem out more. It felt like it had other/more things to say. To address your review for Jessica: She died when we were both seventeen, I’m now twenty, three years older then she’ll ever be (sorry if that didn‘t make sense). And you’re right, I like to think that she lives on in some form through my work. She died very suddenly and it was a moment that shifted me so strongly into the person that I am now. The poem was inspired by my first day back at school and just as I got into my car after class I thought (quite out of nowhere) that I had to call her to tell her all about it, and then it came back to me - she’s not there anymore. Peace, Juliet.
eraced 2006-09-28 ch 1,	abusenice work. keep writing. lost to much blood. ~erAced~

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