1)I'm sure you're expecting this-- good, interesting imagery. Points. The summary is misleading, though; I certainly didn't find love at the end of this poem. Maybe you were purposely ironic, or maybe you need to clarify. You tell me.

2) The first stanza? Inconsistent. "Let me be your jury/Exalt your sins..." This makes sense and I understand it- the creepy 'let me make you pure' stuff really rolls well with me. But then only two lines later you wrote:

"Let me steal your purity," and I thought, what purity? Haven't we just been exalting our sins all over the place? Purity? Hah. Anyway, that's that.

3) Your spare and simple style is pretty much effective, though, admittedly, I can't tell if it's a clever artistic choice or just the telltale sign of a immature poet.

Thanks for the review. You seem to be pretty much awesome.

gorgeous. i love "i want it all. ... and take in your entirety". this is amazing.

xoxo