This is really friggin awesome so, keep writing

coolness, i want to see where this goes, so really keep writing, its awesome...i want to know...about Ophelia

Much better..not that the last one was bad, i just liked this one more...so, um, this is cool, soo keep writing, and destroy all the writers block

I like it...it has a good start and has great potential...so..keep writing, k?