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| His Mercy's Waiting 2008-01-18 ch 1,   | Cool haiku, especially for a first! But I didn't really like the use of "frozen" in this context, because it was so contradictory to the beaming smiles and all. But nicely written! Keep writing! Btw, I can really relate to your author's profile! My fave color is also green, and I am extremely particular about what shade. :) Purple is awesome too. Woo-hoo! :) Have a good day. |
| simpleplan13 2006-11-19 ch 1, | I like this... different subject matter than your other pieces, but still well done... its sweet... it would be col if you made it into a haiku... |
| Getuie 2006-10-23 ch 1, | Perfect. Just a beautiful way you've captured this. |
| AuthorNinjaEarth 2006-10-22 ch 1, | This is a great haiku. It has a great meaning behind it as well. Excellent work! |
| hateandkill-D 2006-09-30 ch 1, | Very nice! Great job!! |
| Basara 2006-09-29 ch 1, | hm... a photograph in a person's mind when he got brushed with death? nice... |
| Guardrail 2006-09-29 ch 1, | Nice image, I love it. |
| Needa S 2006-09-29 ch 1, | Great descriptions. Beautifully done. Write on! |
| chicastar5 2006-09-29 ch 1, | o this is good,some Haiku's go all over the places with words jus to fit the syllable pattern,but yours goes well,and a perfect description of...a picture,or Photograph in your words...lol |