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| hellbentheretic 2006-11-21 ch 1,  | abuseBoy I'd sure hate to be this guy. This is an addition to 'Fries' right? Or a retake; the emotions are more expansive and disheartening, but I guess that's the point here. The first line is very haunting and the last line is simply a slap in the face. If this was real and I think it was than you captured the moment quite well b/c it makes me want to hurt with you (and him too). good good, hellbentheretic |