you cut out a part of it. i can tell. and as far as i know, it didnt help much. the end kind of jerks and the part about the eraser shavings seems unplanned. like it was an accident but you said it wasn't.

There was very nice word choice and creativity. I the the author of the orange people must have helped you!

i liked it. but you spelled off wroung in the second paraghraph. not like i am the one to talk. i also think you should talk about what happens to the rest of the family

LOL awesome!! This is cool, very creative and interesting. Funny too, and a great twist. If it wasn't for the title I would have NEVER expected it. I enjoyed it, good job!

Btw, thanks SO much for reading the story "Hopelessly Devoted". I appreciate it a lot.

OMG! That's fricken trippy! lol his stomach was erased! lol

Great story--this could definitely be made into something bigger, or maybe even a short subject film! Keep writing! :)

wow, i really like this... its like, way better than my attempt at the strange neighbors. (mine was "what if the neighbors really were just boring old people and werent strange at all") so good job... my first attempt at it though actually was paper people which is kinda creepy... but jood job! im very proud (:P)

Wow, this is really creepy. Very well written though. I like it a lot. It might be interesting to make a story out of it, even if it's only a one-shot or something. Anyway, nice work. Definatley keep writing.