Hey! Thanks so much for reviewing Cinderella. I didn't expect that, because it's one of my older stories and has been lying around forever.

Anyway!

I'm glad to see you mostly reformatted this chapter, except for the last few paragraphs...try putting space between every line of conversation, all right? And try using italics instead of capital letters. You don't have to listen to me, of course...I just thought I would request it. :)

Other than that, great chapter. Are we ever going to see Zoe?

Sophie's friends suck!

Hey, thanks for the kind review. :)

You've got such a great natural ability for someone who's only fourteen. (If your bio is to be believed.)^_^ There's just a few things that are more appropriate for writing rather than, say, a Livejournal post. You use a lot of these: "..." in between complete sentences. It would be much easier to read with just a simple period. Also, use 'because' in place of 'coz'. Other than that, this reads just like a professional, young adult novel I would find in a bookstore. Good work!

i'm interested in this story, really i am, but the way you've arranged it (if that is the word i'm looking for) is kind of hard to read. if you would only put a gap between each paragraph, then it would be so much easier! it's just a little hard to keep track of the words i'm reading otherwise.

aside from that, i think your story has great potential. the thing about her grandpa is cute. chanelle and jellica are total **, but i don't think lauren is that much better. i have a friend just like lauren and she sucks **. anyway, update soon, please!