Hm. Check for Chinese words-I don't see any. And what did I say about authors notes! It ruins the poem! They always do. If you want to translate something, just star it (*) in the poem, and at the bottem of the poem, have another star (*) followed by the explanation.

However, one thing that suprised me-I just noticed that you put the title of the poem in your work. Gorgeous! I usually HATE that, but you do it in such a way that it's not obtrusive. I used to put my titles in the poem too, and I got LAUGHED AT by my idol. *sigh* Well, the past is the past. Anyway, I'm just trying to help! But keep it up-I really love your writing.

♥ Alice

atmospherically dark...

nice...