Hmm. I liked the way you switched between love & hate (notlove?) quickly, it gave this... I don't know, spunk? Yeah, spunk! :D

The stanza,
"This state of deception that I’m in
Is only because you relate
To what I’m feeling now
But what exists now will turn to hate",
was a little awkward for me. The rest of the poem was good, that stanza just really bugs me for some reason.

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i love the 1st stanza so much~~but i dont quite get the last line~~still, lovely one!

Yay! This is my new favorite of yours! This particular feeling...wanting something but finding that the person you cling to is hardly what you need...this emotion is very hard to pin down. So, congratulations! Well-written with a consistent rhyme-scheme. I would check a few beats if you were ever in the mood to go back over this poem to do a few touch-ups, but besides that, this flowed nicely and was spot-on. Well done, Helen the Melon.

creative and original..i really liked this...and i can relate. great job

Nice poem, I like the metaphor. Music and love are so similar, and you are very observive (is that a word? I think it is, but I can't tell right now. It sounds weird. I mean to say you are good at noticing things) to see this similarity. Thank you for pointing it out to me.

Wow, I just had to read this one, and I'm glad I did. I loved the way you related music to the narrator's current love. My favorite part I would have to say is the ending. Especially "I’ll leave you on repeat." The way you compared "you" to a song...it was amazing. Wonderful job. :)

this is really good. it's very easy to relate to. :)

I really like this poem. We all (well, at least ME) can relate to it.

I love your reflection at the end too. :)

great job

Great metaphor. Love really is like music. Nice work, I love this. Definatley keep writing.

Lovely poem... And so very true too...