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| Taylor Janelle 2007-11-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseYay! This is my new favorite of yours! This particular feeling...wanting something but finding that the person you cling to is hardly what you need...this emotion is very hard to pin down. So, congratulations! Well-written with a consistent rhyme-scheme. I would check a few beats if you were ever in the mood to go back over this poem to do a few touch-ups, but besides that, this flowed nicely and was spot-on. Well done, Helen the Melon. |
| magnusthewolf 2006-11-19 ch 1,  | abusecreative and original..i really liked this...and i can relate. great job |
| M3741 W1NG5 Alex 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abuseNice poem, I like the metaphor. Music and love are so similar, and you are very observive (is that a word? I think it is, but I can't tell right now. It sounds weird. I mean to say you are good at noticing things) to see this similarity. Thank you for pointing it out to me. |
| Morte d'Amour 2006-10-31 ch 1, | abuseWow, I just had to read this one, and I'm glad I did. I loved the way you related music to the narrator's current love. My favorite part I would have to say is the ending. Especially "I’ll leave you on repeat." The way you compared "you" to a song...it was amazing. Wonderful job. :) |
| Sillygoose49 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abusethis is really good. it's very easy to relate to. :) |
| reach4thesky 2006-10-10 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poem. We all (well, at least ME) can relate to it. I love your reflection at the end too. :) great job |
| Guardrail 2006-09-30 ch 1, | abuseGreat metaphor. Love really is like music. Nice work, I love this. Definatley keep writing. |
| Shadow Whirlwind 2006-09-30 ch 1, | abuseLovely poem... And so very true too... |