Reviews for Ballerinas and Businessmen

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brokendreams21 2007-03-28 ch 2,	abuseI swear, I promised to review this like a million years ago...but yeah. I'm finally getting around to it...in class. But sh...that's besides the point. So anyways, this re-write is as pretty and as powerful as the first. =D This all makes me happy. It pretty much made my day here at school. I can hear the music. Odd...seeing as how I can only really hear my class. Hrrm... This is some pretty stuff...Better review from me later. =D Teacher is getting suspicious... Awesome job! KATTY
bratja 2007-03-13 ch 2,	abuseAhh, this was just so brilliant in so many ways. I love it.
empathic life 2007-03-13 ch 2,	abuseAnd here I thought it couldn't get any better. Just... wow. I'm entirely speechless. I love the way you really emphasized the dancing bit, and the alliteration was so very perfect. The original poem was great, but this is just... incredible. It goes so much deeper into the idea... Agh. I'm totally speechless, babe. Yours, Alex
empathic life 2007-03-13 ch 1,	abuseSo. Apparently, I never reviewed the first version of this poem. So now I am. ^^ Honestly, babe, I'm wondering what you could've done with the re-write to make it better. It's already pretty darn astounding. I love the imagery, and the way you play with the words. It makes everything so vivid. Another great poem, Felicia. ^^ Yours, Alex
The Un-great-ful 2007-03-11 ch 2,	abuseIt seems abstract to me in many places and it is better for it. I like the fourth from last stanza, it really picks up the piece. Alan.
SirScott 2007-03-09 ch 2,	abuseI think I would like to die in saddle. Anyway, that poem did remind me of a dream. How all sorts of people who don't belong together are somehow there. Keep up the good work. ~SirScott
WyrdWolf 2007-03-07 ch 2,	abuseOoh, Iambic Pentameter. Are you guys reading Julius Caesar, too? I love storytelling stuff; songs and poetry that recount an event--they're a fav of mine. I especially love your little bursts of alliteration: jugglers and janitors, missiles and missionaries. They sound fantastic as well as having depth. Outstanding. Shane
Anaare 2006-10-19 ch 1,	abuseWonderful, wonderful! I really enjoyed reading this, felicia. It has a rhythm to it, a natural balance. And it works. All I can say is: a good poem.
Moondog Dozier 2006-10-03 ch 1,	abuseThis has a wonderful rhythmn. A beat or pace really. I like the repetition that glues the whole thing together. And again, I truly like your conceptualization skills. You come up with unique themes and then surprise the reader with the sound and flow of the content. Well, back to this one in particular, the intensity of it works well. The beginning kind of slowly develops to a crescendo, and then escalates after "And I can't find myself willing to care", the next five stanzas can be read through the word placement very rapidly, which matches the falling darkness of the theme. You consistently do well with dark themes because you don't over do with excess. On a progression of the writer applause and compliment, you've really grown as a writer. You've expanded your literary borders tremendously since i've begun reading, so keep writing and working with other writers. MD:77.
General Populus Sloan 2006-10-02 ch 1, anon.	abuseIn your review of my story you said you wanted the opinion of the general populus. Well, here it goes. Blerg. Have a nice day.
heryseshta 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseI like this poem, it feels like she is casting her cares to the wind. It's carefree, spontaneous and unconventional. It also has a nice flow to it.
SirScott 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseGood poem. Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~
Spirit Tigress 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseInteresting...
WyrdWolf 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseWoot for Hell! We must laugh at the agents as they suffer in the bad Hell... This was really neat. Dancing with the Devil...I really liked the lines, 'because now I’m insaneand He is my favorite partner.' Superbly ghetto. ^^
rach5678 2006-10-01 ch 1,	abuseWow. This is really I good...I agree with the person below me...I love the ending.

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