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| sicklysnowwhite 2007-01-11 ch 1,  | abuseno doubt this is religion. good though, although not visually pleasing in the slightest. i dont know what song you're talking about. but i like the beginning. its got a touch if rhyming in it. and i like that you call the church a house. house of God right? i was raised in religion but i think its crap, no offence to anyone. so now my family goes with out me. whatever. this has a nice rhythem. try rewriting it with more feeling and with more discription. i'd like to see it. |
| MRod 2006-12-04 ch 1, | abusethis is true and very well written! |
| Morte d'Amour 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseVery nice...this is definitely true. Sad, but true. And I see it all the time. At the end when you mention the song, is that a literal statement, or is that symbolizing how you must lie to pass the test? Nice job. :) |
| Scarlet Dragoness 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseYeah, this was a little confusing, does it have anything to do with religon? I think it does but I'm not a hundred precent sure. I still love the way you write, its beautiful |
| The Intelligent Designer 2006-10-02 ch 1, | abuseQuestion. Does this have anything to do with religion? If so, I liked it a lot. You get the idea of living a lie down very well. If not, I liked it anyway, but probably for all the wrong reasons. The same reasons I like you. :) |
| PoeticRagdoll 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseLoved this... I can kind of relate to it... good job keep it up! |
| hateandkill-D 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseCool. Very nice job on this! |
| Summer Kidron 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseTruthful, vivid and strong. (I'm sorry I don't have much more to day about, but its good.) |